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Post by grävling on Feb 1, 2017 2:52:55 GMT -5
description of the Frontier Liner
..."the Frontier Liner has a stories history"
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Post by grävling on Feb 1, 2017 2:56:39 GMT -5
Guardian Interceptor description:
s/this ship requires a disciplined crew to use effectively/to use this ship effectively requires a disciplined crew/
Also no mention of armaments.
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Post by grävling on Feb 1, 2017 2:59:06 GMT -5
Cautela Heavylift description:
s/heavylift/Heavylift/ 2 TIMES.
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Post by grävling on Feb 1, 2017 3:06:24 GMT -5
Dragoon Cruiser desciption:
s/makes up what is lacks in subtlety it makes up/forgoes subtlety in favour of raw firepower and durability/
(There are several things wrong with the sentence as it is written, my replacement is just illustative.)
s/THe/The/
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Post by fallen on Feb 1, 2017 13:22:17 GMT -5
All fixed up to this post.
Took #ST2-3327 to add armaments description to Guardian Interceptor.
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Post by Brutus Aurelius on Feb 1, 2017 14:31:50 GMT -5
Found one for Spice descriptions. At Spice level 3, the text reads "Spice Tens". I believe it should be "Spice Tents"
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Post by Cory Trese on Feb 1, 2017 14:46:29 GMT -5
Found one for Spice descriptions. At Spice level 3, the text reads "Spice Tens". I believe it should be "Spice Tents" fixed |
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Post by Brutus Aurelius on Feb 1, 2017 15:01:04 GMT -5
Xeno Spores rumor says that the upper atmosphere of the affected world is filled with "Xeno Spoors". Should be Spores.
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Post by fallen on Feb 1, 2017 15:04:58 GMT -5
Xeno Spores rumor says that the upper atmosphere of the affected world is filled with "Xeno Spoors". Should be Spores. Thx, fixed! |
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Post by johndramey on Feb 1, 2017 16:08:13 GMT -5
I've noticed a bunch of typos in the ship descriptions, if I get some time at the office today I'll sit and correct them all.
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Post by grävling on Feb 1, 2017 20:09:01 GMT -5
I've noticed a bunch of typos in the ship descriptions, if I get some time at the office today I'll sit and correct them all. I may have already reported them as the first things in this thread .... |
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Post by johndramey on Feb 1, 2017 22:57:28 GMT -5
Yup, you got a bunch of them. I was thinking of just compiling all of the character building typos into one big post to make it easier to parse.
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Post by grävling on Feb 1, 2017 23:06:04 GMT -5
Yup, you got a bunch of them. I was thinking of just compiling all of the character building typos into one big post to make it easier to parse. said he has all the ones I mentioned fixed now, so no need. Also, past experience in doing this says don't feed fallen a list of thematically similar problems -- you want one note, per screen that has the problem, or sometimes even multiple notes for a really messed up screen. You also want to phrase them as screen description s/what is there/what should be there instead/ Don't just show the mistake, unless the problem is that the thing is completely unfinished, so you have no idea what should be there instead. fallen has an absolutely amazing talent for looking at a mispelt sentence and seeing what ought to be there instead of what is. So just pointing him at the errors makes for a very frustrating time for the poor man. |
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Post by fallen on Feb 1, 2017 23:34:24 GMT -5
s/what is there/what should be there instead/ Please include this, because as grävling said, I am gifted in absolutely the wrong way when it comes to seeing typos. I simply don't. |
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Post by johndramey on Feb 1, 2017 23:38:22 GMT -5
Well in that case, I'll just pick up where you left off.
Assign Attributes screen (in template creation)
s/ At this priority, your Attributes are minimum XX and maximum YY/ ... minimally XX and maximally YY -or- ... have a minimum of XX and a maximum of YY
And, below, when talking about the attributes you seem to want a question followed by a statement, kind of like set up question followed by a description. So I tried to keep that going.
s/ Are you strong, big melee damage?/Are you strong? Melee damage.
s/ Defensive and twitch reaction./ ... reactions.
s/ Strong like ox? Soak up damage, resist poison./ Strong like (an?) ox? Soak up damage and resist poison.
s/ Charming, manipulative, leader? / Charm, persuasion, leadership? [all traits]
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