Minor end game typos

[hobiecat]

Just a few dialogue fixes for the end game 

In the Shrine Mounts:

• Evesse says, "And when he had killed as many as you he could, he did everything he could to hide his deeds."  It should be, "And when he had killed as many as he could, he did everything he could to hide his deeds."
• Evesse says, "Everyone one of us... damaged beyond repair."  It should be, "Everyone of us... damaged beyond repair."
• Evesse says, "Caal bred his Thirteen children so that he could useus as assassins, thieves or soldiers in his war against his brothers, sister and own mother."  It should be, "Caal bred his Thirteen children so that he could use us as assassins, thieves, or soldiers in his war against his brothers, sister, and own mother."  Though, if I could make a suggestion, I feel that the line would read cleaner if she said, "...in his war against his siblings and his own mother."

On the final map (All-Father's Throne?):

• Wiegern says, "Choose your words careful, young one."  It should be, ""Choose your words carefully, young one."
• Wiegern says, "Then we have force each other's final hand..."  It should be, ""Then we force each other's final hand..."
• After we break enough of the anchors, the game gives instructions of, "We can keep destroying the chains anchors or we can slay Wiegern."  It should be, "We can keep destroying the chain anchors or we can slay Wiegern."

One last thing, though it's not a typo.  There's a bloodstone in the lower right corner of the Shrine Mounts map (next to a tower) that is really a treasure chest (i.e., it looks like a bloodstone, but when you click on it, it acts like a treasure chest with potions, and gold, and stuff.)

[fallen]

Huge thanks for this detailed list!

All fixed, including the dialog suggestion and the chest

<3

[anrdaemon]

Nov 4, 2019 9:36:19 GMT -5 hobiecat said:

Though, if I could make a suggestion, I feel that the line would read cleaner if she said, "...in his war against his siblings and his own mother."

I would argue that. "Brothers and sisters" says not only that he have siblings of both genders, but that he have multiple of each.

[Cory Trese]

Thank you, thank you

[Kaitu]

I'm not quite at the end of Ep2 (Under/Ember not completed), and I starting logging some typos. Love the game, love the story and how well it's written, so (excusing my own typos, I blame autocorrect!) these are a few minor suggestions for corrections:

We are going to have to be careful in this sprawling systems of caverns. (system) [in Underforge?]
They've captured a troll and turned it into a war machine! Beware is mighty arms! (its mighty)
Such gloom and fog... It's like were moving in a soup. (we're)
The Long Trail caverns is much like the glacial caverns where we fought the Orcin before. (caverns are/cavern is)
The Crag Peak fort is the lynch pin that holds the eastern Underdeep open, but its in a very exposed position because of it. (it's)
Our Goddes. She walks slowly and with such grace. Giving us each time with our thoughts. (Goddess) [Grolla]
The inscription here says he died about fifty years ago. He was the brother of Elion Braeys, the Patriarch who lead the family and their people into the Underdeep. (led) [Waning Moon Pass, at the tomb]
[To buy Kincaid] Kincaid's offense is one of finese and speed (finesse)

I think he knows that you and me were all informed there. (you and I) (or maybe Balgair would say it like that!)
I will be waiting for you there. Be careful in this passage, it is trapped and there is a pack of hunds that rules one end of it. (hounds)?
[One instance of 'passed' should have been 'past', but I wasn't logging text that early. 'Past' and 'passed' are used correctly elsewhere, as far as I've noticed.]

Cheers

[fallen]

Thanks for the typo reports, will fix these!

[kaitu]

Hiya, I have another bunch of minor typos to list. Is it fine without locations? Also, do you need the full sentences each time, or can I just post the typo? (E.g. cleary should read clearly, Armath should read Amarth, occuppied should read occupied, Emeson should read Emenson, introdce should read introduce. Is that enough in those cases? I can still write full sentences where you will need context - there are 25+ possible changes.
Is is Heartbeat of Summer or Heartbeats of Summer?
Cheers

[fallen]

kaitu - if they are posted without context, we are not likely to find them.

Best is ...

You should /cleary/clearly/ have said

[kaitu]

Ok thanks for the reply. I have screenshots for most of them so will try to suss out where some of them were taken. They're from end of Ep2, start of Ep3, before Ember.

[kaitu]

Storm Bastion, at the building inside:
While you made the right choice to trust us, you'd do well to be wary of other travels/travelers until they have proven their worth. (Vraes)
I see that you feel very strong/strongly on the point. We meant no offense in asking. (Kjartan)
The attempt ended unfortunately, and we did not find the Darkmoon's/Darkmoons we needed. (One of the brothers, Gansai?)
We are headed their/there under the Braeys Family banner. (Tamilin)

Storm Bastion, at the well:
Their wells run deep, and taps/tap into the yearly snow melt. (Kjartan)

Brunehorn Docks, on asking "Can we take a boat to Granthorn?":
The trip up-river to Granthorn will take a while. But, its/it's easier than taking the Sea Road.

Bone Ridge (southeast corner):
There is so much ice and snow up the ridge...cleary/clearly this lava has only recently broken through here.

Sedollan Foothills (both at the tomb I think)
Will we return to (delete 'to') the Heartbeat of Summer to Tevensa to save Wyatt and Miranna? YES NO.
And if you look around that/at the wilderness, the vibrant greenery of the surface - it is obvious why.

Granthorn before enter Granthorn mines???
They won't be able to hold there long, but its/it's enough to give our forces...Errrr, you...time to reach them.

Granthorn Mines or Bone Ridge???
It is going to be hard fight/fighting up these slopes.

At the inn in Granthorn???
Armath/Amarth, we need to speak to you about Wyatt. (It is correct when repeated when the conversation starts)

Werewolf, Crag Peak:
Who 'I am'/'am I' to question the Spring-Tide? The seasons change of their own accord.

Werewolf in Crag Peak or Sedollan Foothills:
And she has bade me to kill you all. ('has bade' should be 'has bid' or 'has bidden', or could just be 'bid' or 'bade') (Had to look this one up!)

Somewhere in Bone Ridge (didn't screenshot):
I agree (............................) are occuppied/occupied.

Bone Ridge, NW corner:
But every year, the Underdeep devoured more, until there are/were so few left.

Unknown location???
Heartbeats/Heartbeat of Summer

Braeyshaulm:
Take the Emberlog, but be careful. It's/Its fire can be deadly.
Braeyshaulm Inn:
It's not Hagathrun, we all know here/where he is... (Spoken by Kjartan)

Wolf Den Caverns:
Strange...all the road/roads and bridges have signs of wagon travel.

Ember Lake (just sw of camp on Braeys side)
They're good people, the very best. They'd sacrifice it all if it was/were asked of them.

Great Forges (at a Lever in the middle):
Its/It's south of here - how far, I can't tell.

Temple of the Arachnid (nw corner, at the exit that leads to the Great Maker's Workshop):
There/'There are' the stairs...there can be no doubt what is down there. The Great Maker awaits us.
No! I could/'couldn't' have imagined that we would strike down the Dark Four. It made my heart flutter to think it. (?)

Storm Bastion, before getting inside:
But first, let us introdce/introduce ourselves. I am Lord Gansai, ruler here in the Storm Bastion and the older Brother.
Both has/have their eye on our gates and wants/want after what we have within. Both are in a rush, worrying the other will steal the prize.

Sedollan Highlands (cutscene on entering, I think):
The Storm Brothers were not 'able protect'/'able to protect' them.
The Orcin will know this territory well and they'll be laying/lying in wait for us.

Storm Bastion presumably (screenshot is Kyera with black background):
Though dated, their ways are quaint and friendly. Lord Gansai has been a kindly host, even if Emeson/Emenson has kept his distance.

Unknown locations:
I thought we'd reach/reached the surface already.
What other horrors awaits/await us?

[fallen]

kaitu - really glad someone knows how to spell!

This took me a long time to get to, but I have fixed all of the typos, found a few extra cases where passed and it's was used incorrectly to boot.

Thank you for the time it took to compile this across the entire game!

Ps. it is "heartbeats" and I fixed 2 occasions it was wrong.