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Post by fallen on Jan 6, 2013 19:56:46 GMT -5
There are thousands of lines of dialog in the "Made, Not Born" story. Please provide information about typos here.
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Post by grävling on Jan 7, 2013 0:47:36 GMT -5
Initial Conversation s/one way/one-way/ s/getting in to/getting into/ s/your willing/you are willing/ (or you're willing) s/that will match your/ either 'that matches your' or 'that can be made to match your' depending on what is meant. The way you have it now makes it sound like the computer is alive, and makes a choice ... which isn't what you meant, I believe. s/brave new world/Brave New World/ (if you mean the literary reference) s/come on foot/come in, on foot/ s/clinic in the New Boston/clinic in the New Boston Zone/ s/No mega-corp/It's also illegal. No legitimate megacorp clinic/ s/When its over/When it's over/ (or When surgery is over)
It this point it would be nice to get a cutsceen that says:
'Several days later ....'
s/I've wanted this for so long. Now I have to survive./I've wanted this for so long. Why aren't I happy? It must be the drugs from surgery. I've got to survive./
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Post by grävling on Jan 7, 2013 1:24:01 GMT -5
s/whole body is racked/whole body is wracked/ It's from Old English 'wraec' or punishment, not from the torture device
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Post by grävling on Jan 7, 2013 1:29:45 GMT -5
Luka conversations on the phone after you wake up.
#1 s/half alive/half-alive/ s/bar tender/bartender/ s/Long term/Long-term/
And shouldn't there be some money promised as well? Shouldn't I be complaining about being broke?
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Post by blackgauntlet on Jan 7, 2013 1:37:58 GMT -5
Or maybe a funny reference, like, "I've wanted this for so long but at least, I don't have to sell my kidneys for it." ;D
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Post by grävling on Jan 7, 2013 1:39:47 GMT -5
Or maybe a funny reference, like, "I've wanted this for so long but at least, I don't have to sell my kidneys for it." ;D ;D
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Post by grävling on Jan 7, 2013 1:40:47 GMT -5
Conversations with Oxca s/head-ache/headache/ s/you're out of the woods cause you/that you're out of the woods just 'cause you/ s/not getting involved/not getting directly involved/
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Post by grävling on Jan 7, 2013 1:52:23 GMT -5
more Luka
s/its better for me/it's better for me/ s/call me for advice and questions/when you have questions and for advice/
even more The button says 'Got an advice' s/an/any/ s/becoming/surviving as / --- I don't think that the new CK wants advice about becoming one, now.
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Post by grävling on Jan 7, 2013 1:53:51 GMT -5
Max Mercer Conversations s/You body/Your body/ s/unless its necessary at the moment/unless it's absolutely necessary/
something about your body needs sleep to get back on your feet -- should be to get _you_ back on _your feet_
s/head-aches/headaches/ s/Please alert Luka or I/Please alert Luka or me/
and are they 'black spots' or 'blank spots' I should be looking out for ??
s/side-effects/side effects/ s/proprietor for me,/proprietor,/ s/Most of it/Most of it,/
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Post by grävling on Jan 7, 2013 1:57:54 GMT -5
Data Terminal s/busted up/busted-up/
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Post by grävling on Jan 7, 2013 2:24:37 GMT -5
Heaven s/last you through multiple uses/last you a long time/ (we already said used multiple times)
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Post by grävling on Jan 7, 2013 2:27:33 GMT -5
The Gaslamp s/darlin/darlin'/
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Post by grävling on Jan 7, 2013 4:20:19 GMT -5
Taxi Co:
s/Cause/'Cause/ s/who you are working/whom you are working/ (people who say as I may look, tend to be grammatical about who/whom as well)
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Post by grävling on Jan 7, 2013 4:22:43 GMT -5
Smugglers' Den s/Smuggler's/Smugglers'/ (lots of smugglers, correct?) s/genearlly/generally/ s/its your business/it's your business/
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Post by fallen on Jan 7, 2013 15:03:43 GMT -5
Thanks for all these! Will fix as much as we can and push a new release asap.
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