Post by tenbsmith on Oct 28, 2015 10:04:42 GMT -5
Overall, the description of the game in Google Play is excellent. Below are a few suggested edits for the first and last sentences in the 4th paragraph under "= BACKSTORY =".
Second, Templars descend from a Zendu bloodline -- a unique heritage that, with proper training and ritual, givesthem each Templar the ability (with proper training and ritual) to pass all of their memories from their lives (and any memories passed down by their ancestors) to a new born child. This includes memories received from their ancestors.
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The player takes the role of a Templar Captain who hails from a storied Lineage reaching back over 87 generations Templars --and who enabling the player to page back through the ancestral memories to help cope for help in coping with the dire situations at hand.
On another front, the pictures on Google Play are also excellent, I really like the look of this game. On a minor note, the picture titled "Customize your unique veterans" shows a team that may be a bit too white, might be nice to show a bit more racial/ethnic diversity here. I'm not sure how that meshes with lore, I'm just reflecting comments I've seen here on the boards occassionally.
Second, Templars descend from a Zendu bloodline -- a unique heritage that, with proper training and ritual, gives
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The player takes the role of a Templar Captain who hails from a storied Lineage reaching back over 87 generations Templars --
On another front, the pictures on Google Play are also excellent, I really like the look of this game. On a minor note, the picture titled "Customize your unique veterans" shows a team that may be a bit too white, might be nice to show a bit more racial/ethnic diversity here. I'm not sure how that meshes with lore, I'm just reflecting comments I've seen here on the boards occassionally.
