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Post by rabidbite on Nov 13, 2013 17:57:42 GMT -5
Hmm. I will have to work a better description of how vehicles and people move across the Wall and out of the NBZ as my DOME has 2 areas of segregation: 1. The general Dome Radius 2. The Corporate Megablocks included inside the Wall. I've also made sure to state "The Wall extends all the way to the dome". So how the heck do air-vehicles (helicopters?) move through it? How do air-vehicles move to the outside -of- the Dome itself? The short answer is, properly designed gates for both. I have to prudently write that in.  There is also a pretty confusing discrepancy about the limits of Narvidian communications ... which I won't fix because it -isn't- a discrepancy. Its something that will be explained later. (Just in case someone has noticed it.) rabid |
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Post by rabidbite on Nov 16, 2013 21:28:21 GMT -5
Still editing guys. This involves reading/editing my word processor file and comparing it with each post.
I once again started from the very first word of this story. In essence, I have to read -2- books, several times, to iron out inconsistencies.
rabid
PS: Decided to post a lot of the stuff I have written while I EDIT the rest. I could dole it out by days, but I have been rather slow in posting lately, so enjoy the multi posts.
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Post by rabidbite on Nov 17, 2013 9:28:55 GMT -5
I really like torture scenes as expressions of ugliness. Travis is one seriously evil bastard. I wonder if there is something wrong with me.  |
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Post by Deleted on Nov 17, 2013 11:24:18 GMT -5
Better to express it here than in real life.  |
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Post by Jamozk Ekhiss on Nov 17, 2013 13:57:25 GMT -5
Evil characters and scenes are always more fun to do - I love writing brutal murderers, so either it's normal or we're both a bit messed up.
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Post by rabidbite on Nov 22, 2013 10:08:09 GMT -5
Hmmm, I noticed I use the word 'Just" waaaay too much.
Editing as many as I can and using better wording.
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Post by fallen on Nov 22, 2013 14:27:17 GMT -5
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Post by rabidbite on Nov 24, 2013 10:11:27 GMT -5
What do you call those people that run all over cities, climbing and bouncing off walls, up to the roofs,and doing all sorts of acrobatics with a city's urban infrastructure?
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Post by Jamozk Ekhiss on Nov 24, 2013 10:16:27 GMT -5
Free-runners.
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Post by Officer Genious on Nov 25, 2013 12:13:30 GMT -5
Or assassins (AC references for all!). Or astronauts if this is in space...
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Post by fallen on Nov 25, 2013 23:15:32 GMT -5
Also known as parkour
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Post by rabidbite on Dec 2, 2013 9:33:57 GMT -5
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Post by Jamozk Ekhiss on Dec 2, 2013 15:30:12 GMT -5
I'd like to say I always knew Cerberus would make it out alive, but for a second I genuinely thought he might not survive.
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Post by rabidbite on Dec 2, 2013 18:28:45 GMT -5
No one will believe me, but ... I flipped a coin.
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Post by Jamozk Ekhiss on Dec 3, 2013 11:53:49 GMT -5
No, I can believe that. Bigger things have been decided on a coin (my father going/not going to the Gulf War was on the toss of a coin - luckily he didn't, but that was genuinely how it was decided).
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