Post by grävling on May 13, 2017 10:58:37 GMT -5
The text here is pretty messed up. I think you wanted to say that:
For his service to Clan Moklumnue,
Military Commander Anchor Razalli owes
Officer Neerbo a great debt.
It might be that for his services to Razalli, Moklumnue owes him a great debt, though.
The last sentence of the Summary should be something like:
Anchor Razalli has learned that the Cadar Syndicate intends to move the prisoner from Fergal to a high-security prison planet soon. This provides an opportunity for the execution of a daring, but completely illegal rescue mission.
Then, in section 1 you need to say what it is we are to do. Unfortunately, my captain died before I could accomplish this mission, so I never got to find out what it was. I think it must be something like 'monitor communications until you can identify which ship he will be travelling on, and when, so you know which one to attack'.
For the 3rd section, I would say:
Military Commander Anchor Razalli thinks it would be best if Officer Neerbo simply disappears for a while, until the inevitable political furor over his escape dies down.
And then you need to put in something about what you have to do -- sneak him off your ship, sneak him out of the Star Traders District? Dump him in a Wilderness somewhere and wish him luck? Alas I died before I found out what this was but I will look for this mission again in the future, it looks like fun.
