Wording Consistency

[Sinocelt]

Consistency helps a lot with clarity. You should add all your wording-related decisions to a short document for internal use (a style guide for the game).

● Why do talents indicate similar skill/attribute bonuses in several different ways?
● Why is "Damage" abbreviated while "Accuracy" and "Critical" aren't? (See below.)
● Why HP but not MP? Why not 10 Health and 10 Morale or 10 HP and 10 MP?

Let's take three talents as examples:

● In Crew Combat, Buffs self with +25% Ranged Accuracy, +25% Dmg, +10% Critical for 3 Turns, Restores (10 + 0 Evasion) Morale
● Discounts any upgrade of a ship component at the Starport that costs more than $5,000 by 10% + your Repair Skill
● Reduces the price for medical care at the Doctor by 10% + Doctor Skill

They use three different formats, and two of them use different wordings to say the same thing (discounts, reduces):

● ( + 10 + 0 + [Skill] + ) + Morale
● 10 + % + your + [Skill] + Skill
● 10 + % + [Skill] + Skill

Reformatting for consistency, we could have this:

● In crew combat, buff yourself for 3 turns (+25% ranged accuracy, +25% damage, +10% critical) and gain [10 + Evasion] MP.
● Receive a [10 + Repair]% discount on ship component upgrades costing more than 5,000 credits.
● Receive a [10 + Doctor]% discount on medical care at starports.

(By the way, "Discounts any upgrade of a ship component at the Starport that costs more than $5,000" means that you have to use the Starport that costs more than $5,000.)

[Cory Trese]

Thanks. We will continue to work with our editors and improve the application of the ST:RPG styleguide.

Thanks!

[fallen]

Thanks for the feedback on this. It will be a process, but went through a second round of clean up today.

I haven't fixed it yet, but your construction for the discount Talents is very nice

[Sinocelt]

I wish I could claim credit for the construction, but I'm using rules common to several style guides. I'm relying mostly on the Chicago Manual of Style and the Associated Press Stylebook, but I've also read a dozen other guides on style, grammar, punctuation, etc. over the past couple of years alone; I'm currently halfway through the verbose Writer's Digest Grammar Desk Reference. I usually copyedit this kind of documents, for which perspicuity is a necessity.