Post by grävling on Jul 25, 2013 6:02:56 GMT -5
1. 'Incentivises' is not a word, no matter how many marketing departments you have met want to use it. It makes me turn green. Try:
When two factions are engaged in Commerce Raiding, privateer captains attack the merchants and smugglers of one faction to gain the other's favor.
2. All the messages announcing a change in conflict status have a sort of clunky feel to them, because while 'a Blood feud' makes sense, and reads well, 'a Commerce Raiding' does not.
I think we would get an improvement if we changed all the inserted texts to say:
A Blood Feud
A Spy Battle
A Blood Feud
A Trade Ban
Commerce Raiding
Total War
Then we can use the formulation 'are engaged in X' pretty much everywhere and it will always read correctly.
When two factions are engaged in Commerce Raiding, privateer captains attack the merchants and smugglers of one faction to gain the other's favor.
2. All the messages announcing a change in conflict status have a sort of clunky feel to them, because while 'a Blood feud' makes sense, and reads well, 'a Commerce Raiding' does not.
I think we would get an improvement if we changed all the inserted texts to say:
A Blood Feud
A Spy Battle
A Blood Feud
A Trade Ban
Commerce Raiding
Total War
Then we can use the formulation 'are engaged in X' pretty much everywhere and it will always read correctly.
