Post by grävling on Oct 23, 2011 6:47:54 GMT -5
Claire Street Thrift Shop
Clearly the place has has some redesign while the texts have not been updated.
She says: "We sell everything here, honey. You get shot up -- we can help. You need to shoot up -- we can help. That includes computers." which leads me to believe that she should be selling either doctor's services, or drugs. She does have a medkit for sale. And bullets. So if by 'shoot up' you mean 'shoot somebody up' then the dialogue works, but would be better if you said 'You need to shoot somebody up?'. Otherwise, it reads like drug use.
Then she boasts about the computer she has for sale:
'One for a Cyber Knight all right, including enough secure storage to keep up to three jobs!'
except that she doesn't sell a 3 job computer any more. Rats.
s/aren't good for only holding jobs/aren't only good for holding jobs/
Clearly the place has has some redesign while the texts have not been updated.
She says: "We sell everything here, honey. You get shot up -- we can help. You need to shoot up -- we can help. That includes computers." which leads me to believe that she should be selling either doctor's services, or drugs. She does have a medkit for sale. And bullets. So if by 'shoot up' you mean 'shoot somebody up' then the dialogue works, but would be better if you said 'You need to shoot somebody up?'. Otherwise, it reads like drug use.
Then she boasts about the computer she has for sale:
'One for a Cyber Knight all right, including enough secure storage to keep up to three jobs!'
except that she doesn't sell a 3 job computer any more. Rats.
s/aren't good for only holding jobs/aren't only good for holding jobs/