Text Correction Suggestions: Prime: Starport Vault

[Vae Victus]

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Prime: Starport Vault

Text Correction Suggestions:

1.
Too many behinds...->
OLD
"If the Narvidians are behind the xeno behind this first wave, then there will be one of their kind among them."
TO (possibly the below, or another change that eliminates the double use of 'behind')
"If the Narvidians are behind this first wave of xeno, then we will find one of their ilk here."

2.
A suggestion (not an error, but I think the suggestion may be better)
"The roar of battle is behind us and before us now."
TO
"The roar of battle is now both behind us and before us."
OR (changes the meaning slightly-I prefer this option, though)
"The roar of battle is behind us, and before us, there is death."

3.
An Event:
"There must have been a technologist doctor passing through the starport..."
TO
"All these medical supplies; The Faction Defense Forces must have been stockpiling them here to hand out to refugees"
OR (closer to the original; I prefer the above)
"A doctor's entourage must have passed through this starport"

[fallen]

Vae Victus - thanks, fixed 1 and 2. Left #3 as it is.

The more of these you can pile into a single thread the better! Tag the thread with the version number, like "Typos in BF v2.1.9"

[Vae Victus]

-I will plan to place text correction suggestion information in a single thread going forward (or at least until the next version number; whatever is most helpful for you).

-Re: suggestion 3... understood; that said, the event as written does not seem to be a grammatical sentence, so maybe something can be done with it. (note however that I did not type out the whole sentence, so I may be wrong in my assertion that the sentence is not grammatically correct--but based on the snippet I wrote above, it is not grammatically correct).

[fallen]

Vae Victus - the easiest thing is to do the v2.1.9 thread, and then when v2.1.11 comes out, start a v2.1.11 thread.

That way, I know what version the typos are being released against. Often when I am doing typos, I find other ones, so it is nice to know if what versions typos were against.

A Technologist Doctor is a profession in ST. Is that the confusion?

[Vae Victus]

Apr 25, 2016 0:46:55 GMT -5 fallen said:

the easiest thing is to do the v2.1.9 thread, and then when v2.1.11 comes out, start a v2.1.11 thread.

Certainly; I will do that!

A Technologist Doctor is a profession in ST. Is that the confusion?

Even if the word technologist is removed from the sentence, it reads oddly. Would someone on the street say: "there must have been a doctor passing through the starport..."; I think they would be more likely to say: "A doctor must have passed through the starport" or: "A doctor must have been passing through the starport..."

OLD:
"There must have been a technologist doctor passing through the starport..."
SUGGEST:
"A Technologist Doctor must have passed through the starport..."

[wascalwywabbit]

I don't mind the original - I talk like that oft times, but I am noted as having atypical speech.