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Post by drspendlove on Jun 20, 2018 9:21:38 GMT -5
Without a double hyphen or a technically improper semi-colon, this sentence makes it look like the Xeno might be the machine-based lifeform. So important, I'm sure.  |
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Post by fallen on Jun 20, 2018 10:43:41 GMT -5
Lol yes that's an important --
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Post by Cory Trese on Jun 20, 2018 12:39:04 GMT -5
thank you for the careful reading. these reports are easy to fix, but hard to catch. thanks for being an extra set of eyes
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Post by tenbsmith on Jun 20, 2018 13:00:16 GMT -5
Good catch. A tricky sentence, punctuation might not be enough, maybe clearer like this...
"Something older and more evil than the xeno, this machine-based life form is skilled in genetic manipulation, subterfuge, and the art of war."
(I much prefer editing your sentences to writing the ones i'm supposed to be working upon. :-)
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Post by tenbsmith on Jun 21, 2018 13:13:32 GMT -5
Making sure fallen sees my suggested edit in the post above. |
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