shards
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Post by shards on Sept 21, 2013 21:58:28 GMT -5
yeah so i'm all about constructive criticism (and praise! ^_~) so leave some comments yo
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paxdad
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Post by paxdad on Sept 21, 2013 23:16:11 GMT -5
Sweet nice to see more cyberpunk fan fiction! Great start. Will this be an ongoing story? Looking forward to more.
Feel free to check out and comment on my story Data Kill. :-)
Sent from my SGH-M919 using proboards
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Jamozk Ekhiss
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Post by Jamozk Ekhiss on Sept 22, 2013 7:49:07 GMT -5
That was an excellent debut - keep it up!
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Post by fallen on Sept 22, 2013 10:39:44 GMT -5
Sweet nice to see more cyberpunk fan fiction! Great start. Will this be an ongoing story? Looking forward to more. Feel free to check out and comment on my story Data Kill. :-) Sent from my SGH-M919 using proboards - we should post this to the library! |
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shards
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Post by shards on Sept 22, 2013 10:55:03 GMT -5
paxdad - it definitely will  and sure i'll give that a read when i have a moment! fallen - any publicity is good publicity 
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Post by rabidbite on Sept 22, 2013 15:25:20 GMT -5
I thoroughly enjoyed this. If you simply wrote an 1 shot and don't know what to write next, one thing that helped me break through 'the wall' is the concept of scenes. I write a scene that I want to see, and don't particularly care if I write another. Then I write another scene and add 1 or 2 lines that link it to the 1st scene. The idea is to write independent scenes that, as time goes by, you link and ... boom ... a long story. Rabid Rabbit started out like that. Anyways, I go into all that because I want to keep reading your work. rabid |
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Post by Deleted on Sept 22, 2013 18:00:21 GMT -5
I liked it. short and sweet. To someone as busy as myself, thats a virtue.
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Post by beuns on Sept 22, 2013 22:38:13 GMT -5
I really like the way you describe combat, it feels like we were in. I hope you'll throw some more to us |
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Post by fallen on Sept 22, 2013 22:38:14 GMT -5
shards - exalt! Awesome writing and I love hearing the names and places of NBZ in your story! Great work, hope you will keep making more scenes!
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Post by Cory Trese on Sept 22, 2013 23:54:19 GMT -5
Really like the pacing and detail
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shards
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Post by shards on Sept 23, 2013 11:19:36 GMT -5
thanks everyone! i will definitely be writing more |
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Post by beuns on Sept 23, 2013 12:16:39 GMT -5
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Jamozk Ekhiss
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Post by Jamozk Ekhiss on Sept 24, 2013 10:37:16 GMT -5
I love the way you use lines from the game itself - something about it just makes it great!
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and sure i'll give that a read when i have a moment!
