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Post by slayernz on Dec 3, 2013 17:14:04 GMT -5
Red Hills - Dungeon escape Thief says "None of us our criminals. I'm Tamilin, what's your name?" Comment: Spelling mistake Recommendation: Change "our" to "are"
Wizard says "In order for met to obtain official permission to be in the tunnels. Now it seems like a handy excuse to have me locked up." Comment: This is actually part of the dialog box straight before this one, and doesn't make sense when read on its own. Recommendation: Combine with previous dialog box and keep it all together.
Wizard says "I've been investigating it for some time, more than a few weeks. Very interesting, what's down there" Comment: The second sentence isn't well written Recommendation: change to "What's down there is very interesting"
Magus scene at bottom of stairs Magus says "Bah! It is too late to trust something of this important to you flat-footed louts." Recommendation change "important" to "importance" OR remove the "of" so it reads "... something this important to you ..."
Magus says "But you will be the final blow. You will insure his death. ..." Comment: Spelling mistake Recommendation: word change "insure" should actually be "ensure"
In the caverns under Red Hill Thief says "If soldiers are on our trails, we can't stay long." Comment: should "trails" be singular in this instance? "If soldiers are on our trail, we can't stay long"?
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Post by fallen on Dec 3, 2013 17:35:38 GMT -5
slayernz - thanks for the reports. All fixed. Only 2 were still in the code-base and had not been previously resolved. Thanks!
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