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Post by Officer Genious on Jul 19, 2016 15:39:00 GMT -5
I forgot to make this. Discuss away, be sure to critique me if you get the chance so I can learn something. Or derail this thread. Up to you.
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Torps away!
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Post by AA on Jul 19, 2016 15:41:20 GMT -5
Loving it so far  |
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Post by qbspy on Jul 19, 2016 15:53:57 GMT -5
A fine effort. Sometimes sentences could be rearranged for a stronger effect. How did you settle on Roach as captain? Hard to kill?
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Post by ntsheep on Jul 19, 2016 16:06:03 GMT -5
I want to see this reach 420 pages  |
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Post by Officer Genious on Jul 19, 2016 20:22:13 GMT -5
A fine effort. Sometimes sentences could be rearranged for a stronger effect. How did you settle on Roach as captain? Hard to kill? Essentially, yes. I have a backstory where I explain that her father first called her Roach, but I figured it was out of the purview of this story. As for my sentences, I know what you mean. I'm generally far more comfortable writing action or even comedy-- the scenes between are the ones that make my life difficult. |
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Post by qbspy on Jul 19, 2016 20:32:23 GMT -5
I rather enjoyed how the story translates well to actual gameplay.
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Post by ntsheep on Jul 19, 2016 21:17:24 GMT -5
Giving a character a unique nickname that has a background story is always a good thing I think. You can always work on it later when your may be having trouble with the main plot or it could be part of the main plot. I spend just as much time if not more just working out my characters backgrounds in my head as I do writing. I've got loads more for my stories here on the forum I just need to take the time to get it all down. You can never really say a story is finish. There may always be something else you want to add or change. Don't worry too much about spelling and grammar at first, just get things down and work from there. 1st draft, 2nd draft, 3rd draft, draft, draft, draft! Have fun. Laugh at yourself. Be mad at yourself (be careful if your like me). Fight rainbow polka dotted pigs in tutu's. Never stop and question "Have I gone too far?" instead ask "How far can I go"
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Post by Officer Genious on Jul 19, 2016 21:26:41 GMT -5
Giving a character a unique nickname that has a background story is always a good thing I think. You can always work on it later when your may be having trouble with the main plot or it could be part of the main plot. I spend just as much time if not more just working out my characters backgrounds in my head as I do writing. I've got loads more for my stories here on the forum I just need to take the time to get it all down. You can never really say a story is finish. There may always be something else you want to add or change. Don't worry too much about spelling and grammar at first, just get things down and work from there. 1st draft, 2nd draft, 3rd draft, draft, draft, draft! Have fun. Laugh at yourself. Be mad at yourself (be careful if your like me). Fight rainbow polka dotted pigs in tutu's. Never stop and question "Have I gone too far?" instead ask "How far can I go" Thanks sheep, I'll keep this in mind as I seem to have written myself into a bit of a hole. I'll get out of it eventually, just a question of when. 😉 |
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Post by ntsheep on Jul 19, 2016 21:33:48 GMT -5
You are doing great so far. I like the character establishment you've set. The captain seems to have a strong set of morals that makes her question every move but when the time comes there's no hesitation.
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Post by bookworm21 on Jul 21, 2016 2:21:28 GMT -5
I particularly like the way Roach chooses to complete the contract even after she finds out the truth of her cargo. The attitude of 'we've come this far, we don't like what we're doing but it's too late to turn back - so we better collect our pay and leave the sector as fast as possible', in my mind at least represents the quadrant and star traders than unshakable morals likely to get them killed
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Post by Officer Genious on Jul 21, 2016 12:10:42 GMT -5
I particularly like the way Roach chooses to complete the contract even after she finds out the truth of her cargo. The attitude of 'we've come this far, we don't like what we're doing but it's too late to turn back - so we better collect our pay and leave the sector as fast as possible', in my mind at least represents the quadrant and star traders than unshakable morals likely to get them killed That's the idea. I'm working hard to make her ruthless in her decisions, but I want you to cheer for her too, so she has a conscience. It's a balance I'm still navigating. I do have a question for you all, though. Are there sections you wish were worded better or ran on too long? I prefer writing action, for example, but I realize I tend to run on too long. But I never know how readers think of them. Or my dialogue. Feedback please? |
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Post by Officer Genious on Jul 31, 2016 11:46:31 GMT -5
Will updated at some point this week, busy working on the following chapters today. I haven't forgotten the story. |
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Post by ntsheep on Jul 31, 2016 18:12:07 GMT -5
Take all the time you need my Queen.
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Post by Officer Genious on Aug 7, 2016 18:58:56 GMT -5
Going to have to push this back another week at most-- I think I stumbled on something interesting with the story. I'm going to try to dig it out and spice things up. |
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Post by ntsheep on Aug 7, 2016 20:39:22 GMT -5
Will the spice be action, adventure, romance, or all of the above.
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