Jamozk Ekhiss
Star Hero
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Post by Jamozk Ekhiss on Apr 9, 2014 14:19:51 GMT -5
I definitely didn't see it coming, but it makes absolute perfect sense. You're an excellent writer - you keep us thinking and wondering about where the story's going next, and your character writing is brilliant (I'm still working out what to think about most of the characters - the depth you've put into everyone is fantastic).
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Post by rabidbite on Apr 9, 2014 18:49:03 GMT -5
Good!
I was concerned I had dome something obvious. I mean, heck, I burned Stryker's body specifically to throw off the scent but ... you know ... I worried.
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Post by ntsheep on Apr 9, 2014 19:19:52 GMT -5
Burning bodies actually creates a worse smell, not that I know anything about that hehehehehehe!
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Post by rabidbite on Apr 10, 2014 20:19:35 GMT -5
Bah!!
Word has decided that there are too many spelling errors (Names, words I've created, lingo, words not common in the English language, etc) and the spell checker keeps crapping out. I have to continue writing on a SECOND file at this time.
Anyone know how to fix this or increase the spell checker ability? Not being able to flip back and forth through the story is really cramping my progress. I have to keep switching from file to file and it breaks my concentration.
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Post by rabidbite on Apr 11, 2014 7:25:09 GMT -5
A question:
On the last post I described a fight between two avatars.
I CAN continue that sort of epic conflict between Stryker and Cerberus ....... BUT
I am also flirting with the idea of removing that scene completely and starting from scratch. The entire concept of being hacked is very important and I wondered if perhaps, you, the reader preffered something more oriented to the struggles that Stryker had to overcome to reach into Cerberus' internal structures. A view into Cerberus from the inside, if you will. How the composition of the Narvidian looks to Strykers point of view.
Any preferences? I'd like at least 3 inputs on this matter.
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Post by Deleted on Apr 11, 2014 13:21:16 GMT -5
A question: On the last post I described a fight between two avatars. I CAN continue that sort of epic conflict between Stryker and Cerberus ....... BUT I am also flirting with the idea of removing that scene completely and starting from scratch. The entire concept of being hacked is very important and I wondered if perhaps, you, the reader preffered something more oriented to the struggles that Stryker had to overcome to reach into Cerberus' internal structures. A view into Cerberus from the inside, if you will. How the composition of the Narvidian looks to Strykers point of view. Any preferences? I'd like at least 3 inputs on this matter. rabid Which do you feel would be most effective? In work like this I try to keep in mind that an ounce of prevention is worth a pound of cure. No idea why your spellchecker would crap out like 5hat though. |
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Post by rabidbite on Apr 11, 2014 21:34:44 GMT -5
Ok, since no real discussion ensued, I'll continue down this path.  rabid |
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Post by ntsheep on Apr 11, 2014 23:41:12 GMT -5
I was too busy earlier to respond when I saw your post. I think you were\are doing a good job. The fight between avatars was good. I would imagine that Stryker would have to defeat an avatar of Cerberus before he could attack his code directly. I'm not sure what might be better, but I'm sure that you're doing great work.
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Post by rabidbite on Apr 13, 2014 16:33:29 GMT -5
1 more posts, ladies and gents ... and it is over.
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Jamozk Ekhiss
Star Hero
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Post by Jamozk Ekhiss on Apr 13, 2014 16:57:21 GMT -5
...Just one more post? Wow...
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Post by rabidbite on Apr 13, 2014 18:05:18 GMT -5
...Just one more post? Wow... IT IS FINISHED. Thank you everyone for coming along this long long ride. Cerberus has taken a little over a year to be written. Though it is a 1st draft, it is still a complete book. There are so many things to fix : spelling, language, small errors in continuity. The story of Cerberus focused on the Cyber Knight world, the moments before the Exodus of Man and the struggle between the Human Species and its children ... The Narvidians. I hope you have enjoyed reading this long tale as much as I have enjoyed writing it. I bid you ... farewell Yours, Julio Y. Calcaño AKA Rabidbite |
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Post by Deleted on Apr 13, 2014 18:45:43 GMT -5
Farewell? You better not be disappearing here.
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Post by rabidbite on Apr 13, 2014 19:48:38 GMT -5
Farewell? You better not be disappearing here. Story wise I mean. I'm not writing about Cerberus again in any incarnation. The Narvidian anti-hero is done . rabid |
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Post by ntsheep on Apr 13, 2014 21:13:56 GMT -5
Just got to read the end and all I can say is, WOW! This was epic. I guess I'll go and read your other story now but I hope that maybe another Cerberus adventure may come. Even if it doesn't, this one was worth it. Whatever you decide to give us next I'm sure will be legendary in scope, story, and even though they will be just characters on a page, people we feel as if they belong here with us. You sir, are amazing.
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Post by rabidbite on Apr 13, 2014 22:20:45 GMT -5
Just got to read read the end and all I can say is, WOW! This was epic. I guess I'll go and read your other story now but I hope that maybe another Cerberus adventure may come. Even if it doesn't, this one was worth it. Whatever you decide to give us next I'm sure will be legendary in scope, story, and even though they will be just characters on a page, people we feel as if they belong here with us. You sir, are amazing. Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. |
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