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Post by grävling on Dec 20, 2011 17:42:19 GMT -5
South Boston Sacred Heart
s/who keeps it moving?/who keeps it functioning?/
and you probably want spaces around the hyphen.
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Post by grävling on Dec 20, 2011 20:08:37 GMT -5
Knight Horizon HQ
Do you want to say that the next Thopter is 'in a few moments'? I think 'a few minutes' would be better.
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Post by grävling on Dec 20, 2011 22:09:36 GMT -5
Back Bay Importers
s/most tech electronics/most advanced electronics/
s/all-from/all - from/
s/gear-whichever/gear - whichever/
s/The corp's/The corps/
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Post by grävling on Dec 20, 2011 23:35:20 GMT -5
Gideon Flute
s/over price/over the price/
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Post by grävling on Dec 21, 2011 16:49:24 GMT -5
Pharmacy
s/Matrix controled/Matrix-controlled/ (note 2 fixes)
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Post by grävling on Dec 21, 2011 17:29:53 GMT -5
Mama Riki's Massage Parlor (revisited, I missed these earlier)
s/me, my boys, and my girls/I -- and my boys and girls --/
This also is clumsy, but gets rid of 'what can me do for you'.
s/shadowclinic chummer/shadowclinic, chummer/
s/shadowclincs/shadowclinics/
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Post by grävling on Dec 21, 2011 19:40:06 GMT -5
Exxxon Enterprises
s/long range/long-range/
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Post by grävling on Dec 21, 2011 23:27:29 GMT -5
Old Chemical Warehouse
s/fraggin/fraggin'/
s/the Stim Pax are the optiate/the Stim Pax is the opiate/ (note 2 fixes)
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Post by grävling on Dec 22, 2011 7:24:08 GMT -5
Fairmont Self-Defense
s/of various qualities/of varying quality/ (unless you meant 'with various capabilities')
s/determing/determining/
s/high end/high-end/
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Post by fallen on Dec 22, 2011 13:02:58 GMT -5
grävling - page 3 is now rolled into the game so that it will be included in the release after 0.6.13. Great work all around. Just for transparency, you provided a mis-spelling of Sergeant in one your posts (ie. Sargeant). We are finding and fixing lots of other errors as we go!
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Post by grävling on Dec 22, 2011 16:38:17 GMT -5
I am very sorry for the misspelling. Please forgive me. And thank you for all the work.
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Post by grävling on Dec 22, 2011 21:30:49 GMT -5
Purp N Dro Club (which maybe is the Purp 'N Dro ?? ) s/in an see/in an' see/ (or in and see) s/aint/ain't/ s/What to help?/ (  Depends on what you wanted to say.) maybe 'What can you do?'' s/Or maybe you do/or maybe you do/ s/trouble. . ./trouble . . . / (missing space) s/can't just walk around without trouble/can't even walk around without attracting trouble/ (The way you had it, it sounded as if they were toddlers, learning how to walk and failing at it :-)) |
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Post by grävling on Dec 22, 2011 22:39:17 GMT -5
Mars Corp Security Post #2
s/your boys in blue/you boys in blue/
s/but we our/but our/
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Post by grävling on Dec 23, 2011 0:17:38 GMT -5
Bungalow admittance conversation:
s/Quiet a nice/Quite a nice/
s/retake New Boston/retake new Boston./
s/ rulers of free streets/rulers of the Free Streets/
not let in
s/and will let you/and we will let you/
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Post by grävling on Dec 23, 2011 11:49:01 GMT -5
Laughing Dog
s/CyberKnight/Cyber Knight/ (to be consistent)
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Depends on what you wanted to say.) maybe 'What can you do?''