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Post by wascalwywabbit on May 18, 2017 17:01:49 GMT -5
Ravenna
"...hears of God-killing." s/years of...
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Post by wascalwywabbit on May 21, 2017 1:50:15 GMT -5
Southwest Road-Mystic
"There look to five such Towers, spread throughout the City's ruins." s/ There looks to be five such towers spread throughout the City's ruins.
-Towers should only be capitalized as part of their name, not a group reference unless they are God(s) - City could go either way cause City is part of the name and the improper noun... Coma is also optional in that sentence, is there supposed to be pause in the mystic's speech? Seems smoother to me without it.
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Post by fallen on May 21, 2017 15:29:25 GMT -5
Thanks, fixed!
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Post by Nathan on May 21, 2017 15:47:17 GMT -5
Ep2 / Temple of the Arachnid
Kincaid
He isn't going to like that fact that you've been stealing from him . . .
- He isn't going to like the fact that you've been stealing from him . . .
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Post by fallen on May 21, 2017 16:06:50 GMT -5
Thx fixed.
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Post by Nathan on May 28, 2017 6:58:36 GMT -5
Vlotgar
Half of my hunting party are already on the glacier, Kincaid. I have no time to toy with you.
- Half of my hunting party is already on the glacier, Kincaid. I have no time to toy with you.
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Post by fallen on May 28, 2017 11:28:48 GMT -5
Thx, fixed!
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Post by Nathan on May 31, 2017 12:42:58 GMT -5
Ep2 / Gholla Outlook
Kincaid
Baron Tazzer leadr with those qualities. He is a stern judge and an strong leader for his people.
- Baron Tazzer leadr with those qualities. He is a stern judge and a strong leader for his people.
Kjartan
We can hope some have held on to their sanity. Hagathrun, the Ninth Son, was known for his rock solid conviction, his strength of leader.
- We can hope some have held on to their sanity. Hagathrun, the Ninth Son, was known for his rock solid conviction, his strength as a leader.
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Post by fallen on Jun 2, 2017 19:16:23 GMT -5
Thanks, fixed!
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Post by Nathan on Jun 9, 2017 20:26:34 GMT -5
Ep3 / Storm Bastian
Lord Gansai
He is slipping. The battles against the Orcin were too much to ask on one so wounded.
- He is slipping. The battles against the Orcin were too much to ask of one so wounded.
Lord Gansai
The wards have for long kept the bastion secret. Every year, we renew them and strengthen them as we can.
- The wards have for long kept the bastion secret. Every year, we renew them and strengthen them as we can.
Lord Gansai (when handing in the Darkmoon Blossoms)
And, most importantly will help us extend their lifespan longer.
- And, most importantly will help us extend their lifespan longer.
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Post by fallen on Jun 9, 2017 21:48:37 GMT -5
Thx, fixed!
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Post by Nathan on Jun 14, 2017 3:32:54 GMT -5
Ep3 / CoD / First Tower
Seer Lord Apprentice
Your Gods coming begging at my door! Hreck, hrck, begging!
- Your Gods come begging at my door! Hreck, hrck, begging!
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Post by fallen on Jun 14, 2017 13:28:37 GMT -5
Thx fixed!
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Post by Nathan on Jun 18, 2017 6:13:55 GMT -5
Ep3 / CoD / Hidden Sanctuary
Nikolai
I have something tell you, first about yourself. And second something about me.
- I have something to tell you, first about yourself. And second, something about me.
Ep4 / Sheltered Sanctuary
Kyera
If they are desperate to trust the likes of the Seer Lord Kri . . .
- If they are desperate enough to trust the likes of the Seer Lord Kri . . .
Ryethin
Neither creation or destruction is good or evil. It is in the hand the wields them that turns them to good or evil.
- Neither creation nor destruction is good or evil. It is in the hand the wields them that turns them to good or evil.
Kjartan
Before the All-Father . . . what became before?
- Before the All-Father . . . what came before?
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Post by fallen on Jun 18, 2017 22:03:12 GMT -5
Thx all fixed!
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