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Post by Nathan on Feb 22, 2017 4:04:45 GMT -5
Ep1 / First visit to Oskahold barracks
Evan Morolis
There could no better time for you to pass through our city, Paladin. We are on hard times here in Oskahold.
- There could be no better time for you to pass through our city, Paladin. We are on hard times here in Oskahold.
Brian Claemoss
We suspect the vermin have a hand in it.
- We suspect the vermin had a hand in it.
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Post by fallen on Feb 22, 2017 13:46:40 GMT -5
Thx fixed! Please post more here as you find them.
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Post by Nathan on Feb 26, 2017 5:40:17 GMT -5
Ep1 / Oskahold
Selen
And you still be, if Mariah Storm's was able to use the east and west roads.
- And you still would be, if Mariah Storm's was able to use the east and west roads.
Fyona
Whatever this beast, Arhaive, is seeking - we must stop him before he lays hands on it.
- Whatever this beast, Arhaive, is seeking - we must stop him before he lays his hands on it.
Ep1 / Watershed
Kincaid
We are in deep wetlands now. If we are so unlucky to run across a tribe of Krete, this stretch of river would be their home.
- We are in deep wetlands now. If we are so unlucky as to run across a tribe of Krete, this stretch of river would be their home.
Ep1 / Riven Field
Guard
Reeve Cora Ghenkarm has returned from her tour of the Torrent River Outpost, and would like to meet these newcomers to town.
- Reeve Cora Ghenkarm has returned from her tour of the Torrent River Outpost, and would like to welcome these newcomers to town.
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- Reeve Cora Ghenkarm has returned from her tour of the Torrent River Outpost, and would like to meet these newcomers to town.
Kincaid
And drive me to vengeance. What does it matter except that ever since I stepped out of that jail cell, I have been willing to throw my life away at a chance to kill them.
- And drive me to vengeance. What does it matter, except that, ever since I stepped out of that jail cell, I have been willing to throw my life away for a chance to kill them.
Selen
Let’s get out of this town. I suddenly feel like an outlaw. Let’s not risk ending back up in jail.
- Let’s get out of this town. I suddenly feel like an outlaw. Let’s not risk ending up back in jail.
Ep1 / Siege Camp
Guard
It’s a busy place. Lot of preparation underway. Barnett’s Army is preparing to march.
- It’s a busy place. Lots of preparation underway. Barnett’s Army is preparing to march.
Ep1 / Red Hill Depths
Selen
We can't let them take us prisoners. We can't!
- We can't let them take us prisoners. We can't!
Ep1 / Red Hill Throne Room
Lazzon
Oh, this hot-headed younger Sorcerer has been hunting me for almost a year now.
- Oh, this hot-headed younger Sorcerer has been hunting me for almost a year now.
Lazzon
Ahh ha ha ha ha, who do you think you are? Your heroics have proved NOTHING!
- Ahh ha ha ha ha, who do you think you are? Your heroics have proven NOTHING!
Baron
It does not matter. The Magus gifted me the power to kill you myself. Guards! Now!
- It does not matter. The Magus gifted me with the power to kill you myself. Guards! Now!
Barnett
And . . . you saw it at Oskahold as well. In a moment of weakness, the Ratkin are always nipping on at our heels.
- And . . . you saw it at Oskahold as well. In a moment of weakness, the Ratkin are always nipping on at our heels.
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Post by amongstshadows on Feb 27, 2017 18:15:07 GMT -5
Nathan +1 for all these helpful text fixes
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Post by Nathan on Feb 28, 2017 7:59:38 GMT -5
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Post by amongstshadows on Mar 1, 2017 23:58:22 GMT -5
fallen I am curious, are all the heroes educated? I always thought of Vraes as a man of action, rather than word. Perhaps some errors should be left in. It's not like everyone speaks correctly in the real world. No offense to you, Nathan. You're doing great.
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Post by Nathan on Mar 3, 2017 4:40:41 GMT -5
amongstshadows - none taken. Initially, I was hesitant about doing this because I wasn't sure if some of the typos were related to character speech patterns, or if the intent was to have the character sound more or less educated. I've also been concerned about changing the intended meaning of the original statement. ... and as you've already shown, I'm not always right.
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Post by fallen on Mar 5, 2017 14:39:16 GMT -5
Thanks, all fixed!
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Post by Nathan on Mar 5, 2017 15:34:45 GMT -5
Ep2 / Brunehorn first visit
Fyona
Tensions are running high. That it could lead to fighting, even war, between Baron Koda and the Braeys.
- Tensions are running high. That it could lead to fighting, even war, between Baron Koda and the Braeys.
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- Tensions are running high. That It could lead to fighting, even war, between Baron Koda and the Braeys.
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- Tensions are running so high that it could lead to fighting, even war, between Baron Koda and the Braeys.
Ep2 / Granthorn first visit
Vincent
Were there any visitors in town before he disappeared? A man handsome man with startling green eyes?
- Were there any visitors in town before he disappeared? A man handsome man with startling green eyes?
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- Were there any visitors in town before he disappeared? A man, handsome man with startling green eyes?
Ep2 / Vrenhaulm first visit
Vlotgar
The man has never traveled to the road to Reis Lodge! Who is he to tell me how to get there?
- The man has never traveled to the road to Reis Lodge! Who is he to tell me how to get there?
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- The man has never traveled to the road to Reis Lodge! Who is he to tell me how to get there?
Ep2 / Orcin Stronghold
Valent Koda
As you wish it, as I owe you a life-debt. I will look forward to meeting you again under better circumstances.
- As you wish, it, as I owe you a life-debt. I will look forward to meeting you again under better circumstances.
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Post by fallen on Mar 8, 2017 17:59:26 GMT -5
Thx, fixed!
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Post by Nathan on Mar 10, 2017 4:47:58 GMT -5
Ep2 / Braeyshaulm
Morgan Braeys
If that is the case, then this was a waste of all of our time.
- If that is the case, then this was a waste of all of our time.
Ep2 / Vrenhaulm
Morgan Braeys
Vlotgar has betrayed us, thinking all the while he is saving us. But he paid the price for his mistake.
- Vlotgar has betrayed us, thinking all the while he was saving us. But he paid the price for his mistake.
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Post by fallen on Mar 11, 2017 14:44:15 GMT -5
Nathan - thanks for the fixes!
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Post by Nathan on Mar 15, 2017 4:33:39 GMT -5
Ep2 / Somewhere in the Underforge
Fyona
The cultist we fought in the underhouse said something about how their God would turn the faithful in the perfect form.
- The cultist we fought in the underhouse said something about how their God would turn the faithful into the perfect form.
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Post by fallen on Mar 15, 2017 11:19:32 GMT -5
Thx!
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Post by Nathan on Mar 18, 2017 8:41:18 GMT -5
Now 4.3.1 (let me know if I should start a new thread)
Ep2 / Darkmoss Heart
Druid Erghanna
He too must know that his place was coming to an end in this world, and sought to preserve a sliver of himself.
- He too must have known that his place was coming to an end in this world, and sought to preserve a sliver of himself.
Ep3 / Crag Peak
Kincaid
These Volpa! They wear no armor but their own thick hides and they fight like berserks, ever one!
- These Volpa! They wear no armor but their own thick hides and they fight like berserks, every one!
Selen
He's slipped past us somehow and is escaping!
- He slipped past us somehow and is escaping!
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